Hi Paul
Well done on your writing. You’ve got three clear paragraphs, and I like the way your last paragraph repeats a couple of the points you made before – that can be a good way of drawing things together to make a good conclusion.
Just be careful to proof-read your work carefully to make sure it all makes sense. A few sentences could do with re-writing, e.g. “The school`s expect no chewing gum and no card games at school” should be something like “The school does not allow the pupils to have chewing gum or play card games during school time.”
But other than that, a good effort. (And you mentioned Spurs, the greatest football team in the world!) 🙂
Hello Paul,
I liked the way you described the school and staff, but mostly the interesting information you wrote about the school. I especially liked how you decribed the playground because you used lots of detail and more so because it is one of my best sections of the school. To make it better you could have included some of the rules that we have for the areas and the penalties for breaking the rules, like our stay on green policy. What do you think?
Great work Paul,
Well done on your writing. You’ve got three clear paragraphs, and I like the way your last paragraph repeats a couple of the points you made before – that can be a good way of drawing things together to make a good conclusion.
Just be careful to proof-read your work carefully to make sure it all makes sense. A few sentences could do with re-writing, e.g. “The school`s expect no chewing gum and no card games at school” should be something like “The school does not allow the pupils to have chewing gum or play card games during school time.”
But other than that, a good effot.:D
I think you have done very good work. I am very impressed with your level of vocabulary. In addition I would love to go to your school because the level of education is very good. I think that you have to impove by adding more ideas.
I think you have done a good job Paul but you have some unfinised dependant clauses, for example when you said ”all the staff are friendly so as the children” other than that you did a very good gob. 🙂
Epic report Paul, I enjoyed the way you described the school (writing the signature motto was a nice touch). I would write a little more info about the school, Though.
Outstanding work Paul,
I enjoyed reading your work your fantastic work! Apart from double checking your work, you have done a marvellous job in decribing the school.
Well done Paul!!!
Hi Paul
Well done on your writing. You’ve got three clear paragraphs, and I like the way your last paragraph repeats a couple of the points you made before – that can be a good way of drawing things together to make a good conclusion.
Just be careful to proof-read your work carefully to make sure it all makes sense. A few sentences could do with re-writing, e.g. “The school`s expect no chewing gum and no card games at school” should be something like “The school does not allow the pupils to have chewing gum or play card games during school time.”
But other than that, a good effort. (And you mentioned Spurs, the greatest football team in the world!) 🙂
Well done Paul excellent report
Hello Paul,
I liked the way you described the school and staff, but mostly the interesting information you wrote about the school. I especially liked how you decribed the playground because you used lots of detail and more so because it is one of my best sections of the school. To make it better you could have included some of the rules that we have for the areas and the penalties for breaking the rules, like our stay on green policy. What do you think?
Great work Paul,
Well done on your writing. You’ve got three clear paragraphs, and I like the way your last paragraph repeats a couple of the points you made before – that can be a good way of drawing things together to make a good conclusion.
Just be careful to proof-read your work carefully to make sure it all makes sense. A few sentences could do with re-writing, e.g. “The school`s expect no chewing gum and no card games at school” should be something like “The school does not allow the pupils to have chewing gum or play card games during school time.”
But other than that, a good effot.:D
I like the way described our school and staff , you also included our school motto
I think you have done very good work. I am very impressed with your level of vocabulary. In addition I would love to go to your school because the level of education is very good. I think that you have to impove by adding more ideas.
Thank you for pointing my mistake. Next time I will read over carefully
Great work Paul I loved the way you descibed the school and motto. Fantastic work Paul!
Paul you have included every piece of information about our school, well done
I think you have done a good job Paul but you have some unfinised dependant clauses, for example when you said ”all the staff are friendly so as the children” other than that you did a very good gob. 🙂
Epic report Paul, I enjoyed the way you described the school (writing the signature motto was a nice touch). I would write a little more info about the school, Though.
Outstanding work Paul,
I enjoyed reading your work your fantastic work! Apart from double checking your work, you have done a marvellous job in decribing the school.
Well done Paul!!!
You’ve described the school really well and its a great piece of writing its at year 6 standard and level 5 and above quality
well done :O 🙂