Hi Deborah. You use some lovely words such as ‘amazing’ and ‘wonderful’ to describe the school. You have three paragraphs, but I wonder if the last two paragraphs could be longer?
Don’t forget to proof-read your work carefully: you have missed out some capital letters, and some sentences could read better, e.g. “and educate it to their students” would be better as “and teach them to their students.” But well done for being one of the first posts on our blog!
Loads of key information in these paragraphs Deborah, you have included loads of key points in this piece of writting. You have forgotten to put up school motto.
Hi Deborah. You use some lovely words such as ‘amazing’ and ‘wonderful’ to describe the school. You have three paragraphs, but I wonder if the last two paragraphs could be longer?
Don’t forget to proof-read your work carefully: you have missed out some capital letters, and some sentences could read better, e.g. “and educate it to their students” would be better as “and teach them to their students.” But well done for being one of the first posts on our blog!
Loads of key information in these paragraphs Deborah, you have included loads of key points in this piece of writting. You have forgotten to put up school motto.
This is a good piece of writing ,however you could of wrote ,more information.Remember people over the world can read your work
Also Deborah you need to put capital letters in the right places.