Hi im Corben from UK, Belle Vue School. I really enjoyed reading your work and also how you highlighted the promts for this week it really helped me know you used them.
What a great piece of writing Kelsi! I love the way you have used onomatopoeia to build tension and you have used some good adjectives. Keep up the great work!
That is an awesome peice of writing Kelsi. You have used and included good onomatopoeia and you created quite an scary image in my mind. Great work Kelsi, keep it up!!!!!!!
Hannah, St Cecilia
Hi im Corben from UK, Belle Vue School. I really enjoyed reading your work and also how you highlighted the promts for this week it really helped me know you used them.
maybe if had time you would like to visit our schools blog and comment on some of my work: http://year6bellevue2012.primaryblogger.co.uk/tag/corben/
well done corben your work is very intersting
keep up the good workmy name is kelsi
by the way
Lovely story Kelsi with good use of descriptive words, “spooky, dark night, slowly walked, sly wind” Well done!
What a great piece of writing Kelsi! I love the way you have used onomatopoeia to build tension and you have used some good adjectives. Keep up the great work!
thank u for the great comments u have sent
me thank u again
cool i love it
That is an awesome peice of writing Kelsi. You have used and included good onomatopoeia and you created quite an scary image in my mind. Great work Kelsi, keep it up!!!!!!!
Hannah, St Cecilia
WOW! I would have been scared awesome job! 🙂
WELL DONE KELSI ! YOU PUT A LOT OF EFFORT AND WORKED REALLY HARD.
well done kelsi u game the fears