Deborah I enjoyed reading your blog it had all the crucial information it needed . However I think you could of used interesting vocabulary more well done
Well Deborah, in our news letter it said that the meat has been tested to see whether it is safe or not. Mr O’Mahony had meatballs last week in ikea and said he loved them.
I think the Nokia mobile is great. Presently I have a Nokia phone which unfortunetly I have to charge it twice a day.The battery doesn’t keep the charge for many hours. For persons who are interested in mordern gaming, surfing the internet and other tasks, they may find it dissappointing,however such a phone would be great . Imagine a phone that lasts thirty-five days thats wondeful so what do you think St.Cecillia?
WOW! This is outstanding. I would love to have a mobile phone with a long lasting batter rather than charging my phone every day, I have been eating Ikea meatballs for a very long time and I never knew there was horse meat in it.
I think you could of added some more information and made more interesting, other than that I think you did a very good job.
Deborah I love your writing but , you have made a few errors .Your error is from the news about IKEA after the United Kingdom. I am really impressed with your work.
Deborah I enjoyed reading your picece of writing because it gives the reader information about the news. You could have been more detailed about the horse meat scandal, for instance you could of mentioned other shops which have food that contains hose meat and how you feel about the issue. However, you have made a great effort.
I would like to have the new Nokia phone that lasts for 35 days because I have a Vodafone that I charge every week and I am suprised to find Ikea selling horse meatballs. Even though I do not eat meatballs , I still think its appalling
The fact that scientists are now finding horse meat in many foods is very worrying because to me personally I would want to know that I have the food that I thought I ate in my system not horse meat. Supermarkets and shops should know what they are storing on their shelves before selling it so others.
I agree with you Jenniah-Mae, I think that your explaination makes sense for many reasons.This article has made me more caustious about what I eat, therefore, I will now question and check my foods before eating it. Well done Deborah!
This peice of writing is good but you shouldn`t put two differnet subjects into one piece of writing.Also you only wrote a few snetences when you are capaple of writing way more.
Deborah an interesting piece of writing, I honestly think if you carry on writing like this,you can achieve a level 5 or higher by the end of the year 6 term.
I think your writing is marvellous and your punctuation, spelling and structure is absolutely wonderful!!!
Keep up the good work!!!
Tobi.
Al this time I was buying meatball from Ikea. Shame on you Ikea. The horse meat scandal should end as soon as possible. By the way outstanding work Deborah.
Deborah I enjoyed reading your blog it had all the crucial information it needed . However I think you could of used interesting vocabulary more well done
Well Deborah, in our news letter it said that the meat has been tested to see whether it is safe or not. Mr O’Mahony had meatballs last week in ikea and said he loved them.
I think the Nokia mobile is great. Presently I have a Nokia phone which unfortunetly I have to charge it twice a day.The battery doesn’t keep the charge for many hours. For persons who are interested in mordern gaming, surfing the internet and other tasks, they may find it dissappointing,however such a phone would be great . Imagine a phone that lasts thirty-five days thats wondeful so what do you think St.Cecillia?
WOW! This is outstanding. I would love to have a mobile phone with a long lasting batter rather than charging my phone every day, I have been eating Ikea meatballs for a very long time and I never knew there was horse meat in it.
I think you could of added some more information and made more interesting, other than that I think you did a very good job.
Deborah I love your writing but , you have made a few errors .Your error is from the news about IKEA after the United Kingdom. I am really impressed with your work.
Deborah I enjoyed reading your picece of writing because it gives the reader information about the news. You could have been more detailed about the horse meat scandal, for instance you could of mentioned other shops which have food that contains hose meat and how you feel about the issue. However, you have made a great effort.
I would like to have the new Nokia phone that lasts for 35 days because I have a Vodafone that I charge every week and I am suprised to find Ikea selling horse meatballs. Even though I do not eat meatballs , I still think its appalling
The fact that scientists are now finding horse meat in many foods is very worrying because to me personally I would want to know that I have the food that I thought I ate in my system not horse meat. Supermarkets and shops should know what they are storing on their shelves before selling it so others.
I agree with this, Deborah, as I would want to buy this in the future.
I agree with you Jenniah-Mae, I think that your explaination makes sense for many reasons.This article has made me more caustious about what I eat, therefore, I will now question and check my foods before eating it. Well done Deborah!
This peice of writing is good but you shouldn`t put two differnet subjects into one piece of writing.Also you only wrote a few snetences when you are capaple of writing way more.
Deborah an interesting piece of writing, I honestly think if you carry on writing like this,you can achieve a level 5 or higher by the end of the year 6 term.
I think your writing is marvellous and your punctuation, spelling and structure is absolutely wonderful!!!
Keep up the good work!!!
Tobi.
I think it is great I have learnt about the nokia phones. I didn’t know that. good work
Kimberley
Al this time I was buying meatball from Ikea. Shame on you Ikea. The horse meat scandal should end as soon as possible. By the way outstanding work Deborah.