Fabulous recount! I like the idea of using subheadings to organise your writing. You wrote in chronological order and had time to add pictures.
Next time, you used the time connective ‘after’ several times.
Alternatives to avoid repetition: later, next, soon, when, afterwards, while, finally
Miss Moncrieff
Fabulous recount! I like the idea of using subheadings to organise your writing. You wrote in chronological order and had time to add pictures.
Next time, you used the time connective ‘after’ several times.
Alternatives to avoid repetition: later, next, soon, when, afterwards, while, finally
Miss Moncrieff