Wow Nikkala, this work is out-standing and I think you have covered all the points in persuasive writing that had to be acomplished. I also admire the way you have used rhetorical questions in your leaflet. This leaflet really catches my eye and if I was a parent I know I would send my child to this school because of your poster. I also like the way that you kept the information about the school factual but very descriptive. In addition to this, your spelling and grammar is very good. Impeccable work!!!!
I loved your piece of work it is brilliant just like Hannah. It really caught my eye and that was outstanding the way you just let someone come to our school is !!!!!!!!!AWSOME WELL DONE NIKKALA!!!!!!!!,
Nikkala I really like your leaflet because you included rhetorical questions to make the reader think. Also I liked how you used descriptive language and adjectives to make the school sound amazing. Good use of subheadings to let the reader know what subject your talking about. I think you have covered the main concepts for an actual leaflet, while using effective language about the school. Well done!!! Lovely work.
I think there should be more clubs, that are involved with music! I know we have choir, but for some children who are older, want to use musical instruments. E.g. Piano,Drums and so many more lively instruments. There should be debate clubs, that way children would be more invloved with politics also it help their speech and pronounciation.
I will let you know if there are any more clubs, Nikkala
I know one of our teachers can play the steel pans. I had better not say her name as she might get ‘mobbed’ to start a club after half term! I will speak to her and see if she has the time to run a club.
A debating club would be good! I will speak to Ms Butler and see if we can have a debating club in the summer term. I agree with you it would improve confidence with public speaking and is also very good at making you think about about your belief and response to the question.
Thank you for your constructive critisizum, i’ve looked over my work and now I realised that I have made a slight error I repeated the same thing twice.
Nikkala this piece of writing truly deserves a level 5 or even above. I have truly enjoyed reading this quality piece however, I think some words could be substituted because to be a level 5, you need to think like a level 5. You need to show off that you have the vocabulary to match the level.
Well done!
Nikkala your writing is outstanding , I also like way you used rhetorical questions. However I think you coulav explained more what you think of the school . You have wrote at a high stand ,if I Were an adult ,I Would definetely send child to st pauls and all hallows primary cool
Jamellia, I absoloutely agree with your comment on Nikkalas peice of writing, but you have misplaced where to put the capital letters in the comment you have posted.
Nikkala your writing is exceptional although I think you could have explained what you think of the school fully . Well done I could not have done better myself .
Thank you I enjoyed reading this report, you used strong vocabulary and gave important information on our school. Nikkala I liked how you talked about what the school beleive when it comes to caring for all pupils, well done!
Nikkala this work is outstanding and it really caught my eye when I was checking out everyone’s blog. In my opinion, this piece of writing truly deserves a level 5 and I have truly enjoyed reading this.If i was a parent in search of a school to send my child to, i will definetely send my child to St. Pauls after reading your leaflet.
magnificent piece of writting Nikkala.
Nikkala you have produced a great piece of writing. You have included everything about the school. I have not found any mistake. I cannot find a way for you to improve your work because you have followed the order of work and the plan. Well done. Outstanding work!!!!!!
Nikkala your writing its wonderful. You have covered all the events and you have really described the school. You says:
Nikkala your writing its wonderful. You have covered all the events and you have really described the school. You have told us what the school is about how children get along their , how they respect everyone. Well done Nikkala you deserve a level 5
Nikkala when i read this piece of work i was so amazed at how you used the vocabulary and Hannah i also agree with you i absolutely love the use of rhetorical question this piece of work of yours is one of the best work i have everrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!!!!!!!!!!!!! seen in this school i am very proud of you and i bet everyone who has seen this outstanding,wonderful,impeccable ,superb piece of work is to well done Nikkala
Wow Nikkala, this work is out-standing and I think you have covered all the points in persuasive writing that had to be acomplished. I also admire the way you have used rhetorical questions in your leaflet. This leaflet really catches my eye and if I was a parent I know I would send my child to this school because of your poster. I also like the way that you kept the information about the school factual but very descriptive. In addition to this, your spelling and grammar is very good. Impeccable work!!!!
I loved your piece of work it is brilliant just like Hannah. It really caught my eye and that was outstanding the way you just let someone come to our school is !!!!!!!!!AWSOME WELL DONE NIKKALA!!!!!!!!,
Nikkala I really like your leaflet because you included rhetorical questions to make the reader think. Also I liked how you used descriptive language and adjectives to make the school sound amazing. Good use of subheadings to let the reader know what subject your talking about. I think you have covered the main concepts for an actual leaflet, while using effective language about the school. Well done!!! Lovely work.
Nikkala, I have read your comments.
Are there any extra clubs you think we should run in the Summer Term. We would need to let Ms Butler know now.
I think there should be more clubs, that are involved with music! I know we have choir, but for some children who are older, want to use musical instruments. E.g. Piano,Drums and so many more lively instruments. There should be debate clubs, that way children would be more invloved with politics also it help their speech and pronounciation.
I will let you know if there are any more clubs, Nikkala
I know one of our teachers can play the steel pans. I had better not say her name as she might get ‘mobbed’ to start a club after half term! I will speak to her and see if she has the time to run a club.
A debating club would be good! I will speak to Ms Butler and see if we can have a debating club in the summer term. I agree with you it would improve confidence with public speaking and is also very good at making you think about about your belief and response to the question.
Thank you for your response, also trying to make my decisions actually happen. I seriously do think more clubs could affect children’s skills.
Wow !! I think your leaflet is amazing but, you made a slight error.
I also think that your grammatical and spellings are amazing.
Thank you for your constructive critisizum, i’ve looked over my work and now I realised that I have made a slight error I repeated the same thing twice.
Thank you
Nikkala this piece of writing truly deserves a level 5 or even above. I have truly enjoyed reading this quality piece however, I think some words could be substituted because to be a level 5, you need to think like a level 5. You need to show off that you have the vocabulary to match the level.
Well done!
This ia great piece of writing ,your lanuage and grammar is amazing and I agree with Tobi this does deserve a level 5 and above.Well done Nikkala
Nikkala your writing is outstanding , I also like way you used rhetorical questions. However I think you coulav explained more what you think of the school . You have wrote at a high stand ,if I Were an adult ,I Would definetely send child to st pauls and all hallows primary cool
Jamellia, I absoloutely agree with your comment on Nikkalas peice of writing, but you have misplaced where to put the capital letters in the comment you have posted.
Nikkala your writing is exceptional although I think you could have explained what you think of the school fully . Well done I could not have done better myself .
Thank you I enjoyed reading this report, you used strong vocabulary and gave important information on our school. Nikkala I liked how you talked about what the school beleive when it comes to caring for all pupils, well done!
Nikkala this work is outstanding and it really caught my eye when I was checking out everyone’s blog. In my opinion, this piece of writing truly deserves a level 5 and I have truly enjoyed reading this.If i was a parent in search of a school to send my child to, i will definetely send my child to St. Pauls after reading your leaflet.
magnificent piece of writting Nikkala.
Nikkala you have produced a great piece of writing. You have included everything about the school. I have not found any mistake. I cannot find a way for you to improve your work because you have followed the order of work and the plan. Well done. Outstanding work!!!!!!
Nikkala your writing its wonderful. You have covered all the events and you have really described the school. You have told us what the school is about how children get along their , how they respect everyone. Well done Nikkala you deserve a level 5
good work
it is all true well done nikkala 🙂
Well Done ! nikkala you have used powerful vocabulary 😀 😛 🙂
Nikkala when i read this piece of work i was so amazed at how you used the vocabulary and Hannah i also agree with you i absolutely love the use of rhetorical question this piece of work of yours is one of the best work i have everrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!!!!!!!!!!!!! seen in this school i am very proud of you and i bet everyone who has seen this outstanding,wonderful,impeccable ,superb piece of work is to well done Nikkala
good work